Is this an interesting start to my story?

Sounds like a good start to me! I love how you took such a simple and over done idea and twisted it slightly to make it fun and dark. My only critique would be to set your priorities straight and to make sure your not skipping around when it comes to your intro. Would you rather introduce your setting first, and then make the characters come in, or the other way around? I had to read it twice through to understand some of the concepts fully. But it sounds like a great start to a good piece to me! If you would like to send me the final edition of the piece, that would be great!